Dream

This is awesome and so true in my life these days too. its always nice to read a poem that i can fully relate to

Once again a amazing poem! Many people can relate to this poem including me -.- I feel exactly like this right now with my boyfrined -sighs- it hurts =] But S.... happens =] mwah xxxxx great write!

Alright, this was kind of differnet. I liked the format of the poem.
But I have some suggestions:

"Awake form this dream I do not.
For life is not the dream I thought."

It should be "from" not "form"
And maybe add a hyphen. So basically I think it would look better as

"Awake from this dream- I do not.
For life is not the dream I thought."

And on the last stnaza

"Dreams and nightmares mix to make one.
It's just a game never to be won."

Change the last line to

"It's just a game that will never be won."

That sounds better to me.

Also, I like "to die, this moment" better than "disappear, now,"

Anyways, you were very good at expressing your feelings. Hope I helped.

5/5

This poem is something many can relate to. Dreams turn into nightmares in which the one you love stabs you in the heart. The short lines and rhymes are apperantly your style. I liked the choosing of words besides the bunch "turn very bad" which didn't pass the strong meaning it needed to bring. Overall nice work 4/5

This poem reminds me of my marriage yet I still enjoyed reading it

The couplets flowed very smoothly

And the theme had philosophical depth although it seemed inspired by a real experience

To find the synthesis in which opposites and contradictions meet and merge could put a philosopher on the verge of a great discovery