Wow great poem that would be the worst thing 5/5

Wow so sad...and i loved the words you used
made the reader get into the poem
5/5 <33

Okay this poem was just alright for me
The beggining for me was a little rough
I thought it was a little bland and there
wasn't anything raw about it
Then you hit the middle and it progressed well
up towards the end
the ending was pretty good
nice write
4/5

This poem really hit home for me. I felt like this when my boyfriend died. I'm not really sure if it's about death or losing someone, but that's how I read it. Good job.

I like the emotional twist within the poem but I think that you could add some metaphors to improve the whole portrait within this piece.
The imagery that you created is interesting and there are some truly intense lines in this piece.
All in all, I think that this is good write that many people can relate to but it could use some improvements.

This poem reminds me of my marriage yet I still enjoyed reading it

The couplets flowed very smoothly

And the theme had philosophical depth although it seemed inspired by a real experience

To find the synthesis in which opposites and contradictions meet and merge could put a philosopher on the verge of a great discovery

This poem is something many can relate to. Dreams turn into nightmares in which the one you love stabs you in the heart. The short lines and rhymes are apperantly your style. I liked the choosing of words besides the bunch "turn very bad" which didn't pass the strong meaning it needed to bring. Overall nice work 4/5

Alright, this was kind of differnet. I liked the format of the poem.
But I have some suggestions:

"Awake form this dream I do not.
For life is not the dream I thought."

It should be "from" not "form"
And maybe add a hyphen. So basically I think it would look better as

"Awake from this dream- I do not.
For life is not the dream I thought."

And on the last stnaza

"Dreams and nightmares mix to make one.
It's just a game never to be won."

Change the last line to

"It's just a game that will never be won."

That sounds better to me.

Also, I like "to die, this moment" better than "disappear, now,"

Anyways, you were very good at expressing your feelings. Hope I helped.

5/5

Once again a amazing poem! Many people can relate to this poem including me -.- I feel exactly like this right now with my boyfrined -sighs- it hurts =] But S.... happens =] mwah xxxxx great write!

This is awesome and so true in my life these days too. its always nice to read a poem that i can fully relate to