The dog

by damont   Apr 10, 2008


I'm like a dog when it comes to you
you leave me constantly
im left with bottled up agony
you have my heart and i want it back
so i search for you without lack

i've found you tracking your steps
your as beautiful as the day you left
the reason i love you has been kept
so i look into your deepest depths

i try to find what you constantly hide
i know its there but not easy to find
the truth can come out with some alone time
but i see it in her eyes when she looks into mine
i feel it in her heart and its on her mind
i want her to admit it so we both can be fine
but she won't! she has denied me for the last time!!

She needs me so i act blind to the pain inside
and numb the wounds which causes my hopes to die
do this for me please
come with me she pleads

how can i deny such beauty
she feels as if she owes me
she reveals her feelings for the time spent
i share my love with her once again
without a word or thought our relationship ends
and im force to start all over again

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  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    Okay two suggestions:
    - change the last line of the first verse, maybe something about how you're following her track or something, cause that soundslike you're just trying to find a rhyme
    -you are is contracted to you're, so thats what it should be in the 2nd line of the 2nd verse.
    sorry to focus on the negative - this really is a great poem and the metaphor is one i've noticed myself when a guys really in love . . . also, i love the ending. all in all great job :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    This is awesome.
    I love it.
    The title is simple but intriguing.
    It's a great metaphor.
    And the way you described your yearning for the person was easy to compare to the way a dog yearns for an owner.
    Your words were beautiful and well said.
    Normally I hate rhymes, but the rhymes you had just flowed perfectly and were unforced.
    Stunning work.
    5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by xXSomeoneLoveMeXx

    I like this poem
    very good and very deep :)

  • 16 years ago

    by ForsakenBeautyXx

    Its about her isnt it?
    in the end though..u realize its time to start over.
    You cant let her tangle you by a string...cut it loose. You have the scissors.

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Its easy to not go into there traps once again..you have gotten hurt...and that should have been the end..dont go down the same path...cause she might not be the same person as before! i loved it and dont just dont let her capture you into her trap your not a dog your human and you should be treated like one!

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