Comments : The dog

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Its easy to not go into there traps once again..you have gotten hurt...and that should have been the end..dont go down the same path...cause she might not be the same person as before! i loved it and dont just dont let her capture you into her trap your not a dog your human and you should be treated like one!

  • 16 years ago

    by ForsakenBeautyXx

    Its about her isnt it?
    in the end though..u realize its time to start over.
    You cant let her tangle you by a string...cut it loose. You have the scissors.

  • 16 years ago

    by xXSomeoneLoveMeXx

    I like this poem
    very good and very deep :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    This is awesome.
    I love it.
    The title is simple but intriguing.
    It's a great metaphor.
    And the way you described your yearning for the person was easy to compare to the way a dog yearns for an owner.
    Your words were beautiful and well said.
    Normally I hate rhymes, but the rhymes you had just flowed perfectly and were unforced.
    Stunning work.
    5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    Okay two suggestions:
    - change the last line of the first verse, maybe something about how you're following her track or something, cause that soundslike you're just trying to find a rhyme
    -you are is contracted to you're, so thats what it should be in the 2nd line of the 2nd verse.
    sorry to focus on the negative - this really is a great poem and the metaphor is one i've noticed myself when a guys really in love . . . also, i love the ending. all in all great job :)