I thought the poem was okay on the whole. For me, it didn't really seem to flow very well. My favorite stanza was the third one, because it flowed the most and I liked what was being said, as well as the rhymes. I also really liked the end, nice little twist. A good end is always key in a poem.

Brad

Wow!.. this poem is amazing and brilliantly written!

The ending is so unexpected and great! While reading it I was thinking.. yea its true that is the perfect world but too bad it doesn't exist.. but it was still interesting to read about and you did a great job describing this other world..

and then BAM the last line tells it all and makes the entire poem make that much more sense..

amazing job. Great ending. I wouldn't change a thing. 5/5 =)