I really enjoyed it a lot
I think it would be a lot better though
if you made each line one complete thought
i think it would have a better flow
The word choice was good and
i liked the message
hang in there
5/5
kaila

The fear in me is so strong i cling
to life just trying to survive but do they know
shes alone.In my head i think of many things
but mainly wishing i were dead.

the last stanza was brilliant your own rhythm makes it unique and well mind blowing i loved the poem 5/5

Good write...
your emotional outburst... the description... the pain... it can be felt in your write...

good job..keep up..

I think it needs a little more organization.But it was a great poem.Good basic word choice.Good work.5/5

-Amber