Loved the flow
different style made it sound great
loved it 5/5
the ending was awesome

This piece is similar to the previous one I commented. I have nothing new to say. the Idea is almost the same, the choosing of words here is also fine. The structure and flow are still a mess. 4/5

^ i agree it was similar to the previous i write, but this must be a subject that you feel you have to express your self in, and believe me, your good at expressing yourself in poetry so don't ever give that up.

secondly, the little angry retourical questions in there, give it a nice touch xx