Sometimes, someday, somewhere.

by Boy   Apr 11, 2008


Sometimes, I spend in thinking.
The One day I will find her.
The light of my love,
Will slash the dark ways.

Someday, my wait will end.
I will find her near me;
Spreading the arms,
Waiting to hold me.

Somewhere, she is made for me;
Guessing she will love me.
She and I will be together,
For everyone clear to see.

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written by: hassan kirmani
time: 11:47pm

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  • 15 years ago

    by AnCi

    Wooow! I guess that most of us can relate to this one. The longing and waiting for that one true love that never seems to come, but we are all sure that someday we will find him/her!! Awsone job!

  • 16 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    I really like this poem. Beautifully written.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Freedom

    Nice expresion,the more i read your poems,the more i like :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Rasheed Khokhar

    Your wording are relates with desires and Hope.... Welldone... 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Okay nice job
    for me the first stanza didn't flow that well
    maybe switch up some words or something
    a helpful way to know if the flow is on
    is to do a syllabol count
    if all syllabols are around the same number
    then you've got yourself a nice flow
    The poem could have used some descriptions
    or emotions maybe?
    When you write you want to become
    deep within yourself and truly
    drag everything you've got out of the experience
    the last stanza was a bit cliche by throwing new
    words in there then you might add a little spice to the poem itself
    The title for this poem though was cool
    i've done the same thing before
    nice job
    4/5

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