Cry

by Nathanilliam   Apr 11, 2008


I wish i could cry
it's been years since I have
Theres no more emotion left in me

I used to be a cry baby
the object of torture and humiliation
till I finally taught myself to stop

The stories you've told
of your childhood years
and you present cares

Make me want to let go
to let the tears flow
but so far I've tried in vain.

Will I ever cry again?
I asked myself as I
laid in bed last night

I hope that time is soon,
for I feel less than human
cause my emotions are locked
please break them open for me.

"I'm testing to see if i can write about stuff other than myself. (I guess i'm cheating, this used to be me.) please let me know how I did."

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  • 16 years ago

    by she

    For I feel less than human
    cause my emotions are locked
    please break them open for me.
    --love this part
    maybe make it flow better, but it's still really good

  • 16 years ago

    by AlexBlythe

    You did really well =]

  • 16 years ago

    by x Mo x

    I like the idea you had with this, but you didn't do too great a job. No offense at all! It didn't really have any sort of rhythm. There was no rhyming either...I was so confused. I mean it made sense, but I was waiting for the rhyme and beat!
    I think the first stanza went great, and the last one, if you just take off the last two words, I think it'll work great!
    Keep up the idea though. The idea and the emtion was there, it was just all confused with the set up.

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Lol i thought this wa an ok start lol

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