This poem is a very sad peice, it touched me. The structure is broken all the way to the end, I personaly don't like that, but maybe it's your style. The rhymes showed here and there, the flow was a mess. Besides the choosing of words and idea it was not that good. 4/5

Firstly i must say the flow was prefect for the poem. but secondly, it would make it a little bit easier if you seperated it like so v

Please don't look into my eyes
my heart was shattered. From all of the lies.
I tried so hard to not let it show,
But now I'm slipping away and Ive already
let go

- its boring i know, but its generally what everyone is used to reading it kinda helps to read it .

'I didn't want
to be known as the girl who couldn't
be saved.'
- and i have had that fear for a long time, and it was wrote so prefectly.

i wish i never felt like that, but i did along time ago. that poem was brilliant had me glued to the screen. can't wait to check out some more. :]

Good write...
maybe you could have separated the sentances into different stanzas and tried to rhyme it...