Comments : Dream Catcher

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I like this a lot, it has certain touch of fantasy and it is very elegant and beautiful. The imagery that you created is so captivating and creative. This poem is original, very effective from the beginning to the end. I really like the metaphors that you used along with fantastic, superb atmosphere of the whole poem. I really like your writing style, it is creative and refreshing, and this poem is not an exception from the great pieces that I've read from you.
    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nicole the Fairy

    Loved this poem!
    Except the last stanza!!
    Argghh! The last stanza would have been alot better if the second line ended in "-ight".
    Your Stanza:
    "He slips in and out of reality,
    Jumping through your dreams,
    Climbing up old oaken trees; Unseen,
    For he is the Dream Catcher."

    My Example Stanza:
    "He slips in and out of reality,
    In your dreams, in your sight,
    Climbing up old oaken trees; Unseen,
    For he is the Dream Catcher."

    ** Just an example/opinion stanza **

    It's up to you, but I think it would sound and move alot better with the "-ight" word.
    Anyway, good luck with it ;]
    Keep it upp <3
    5/5

    - Nicole xx