I think that this piece is very creative and original. It has interesting narrative and descriptive tone which makes it very powerful.

Honestly, the only thing that I don't like about this piece is the line "By the way , I recommend Pepsi for that . . .", it somehow threw me off because through the every paragraph you express emotions and that line somehow doesn't fit the whole concept and the atmosphere that you created.

Overall, you kept my attention from the beginning to the end,and your great writing style pulled me deeply into this piece. I like your choice of words, too.

The last paragraph is my favorite one because I like the descriptions and vivid imagery that you portrayed here.

The whole piece sounds very personal, like it's written straight from the heart- emotions simply flow through every line.

All in all, this is greatly written, and I enjoyed in every line.

Keep up!