Don't make me a promise, Till the war is gone.

by Gizmo   Apr 12, 2008


As he boarded the bus the hugs were final and sad,
he looked at the things that he may and could have had,
this could be the last time he would hold this pretty lass,
and he would see her in his mind as the months slowly pass.

he turned to her and he could see her cry,
the one thing he promised he wouldn't do at this goodbye,
he held her hand and promised his soul and his heart
that he'll love her even though there a million miles apart.

she held him close, and whispered so softly,
the words so true and tender straight from her heart:

' i always loved you i always have sweetheart,
don't promise me them things cause we are worlds apart.
just promise me you'll know this is all true and fair,
that were ever you are, my heart will be there.

and whatever you do, and whatever you see,
i will love you from a distance for eternity.
but don't promise me them things cause we are worlds apart,
just promise that you'll keep my fragile breaking heart.

because when the dust has settled and the war is done,
and the trigger is pulled on the last smoking gun,
then you can make me a promise true and fair,
that you will come home, and i will be there.'

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  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    I love this title . Oh boy . I love it . I love it . Lala . So here goes the second one . Lol . . .

    First : Aww . I must say the first stanza was a great hook in -- You got my attention by describing the actual event and it was heartbreaking for me . Wow . I love it . And your flow is strong and smooth .

    Second : Honestly , I am so suprised that your flow is still going so smoothly . Wow and it gets more sad as the poem goes on . Oh goodness dear -- I love the storyline and the way you describe it . I am guessing this is a situation you or someone close to you because you write well about it . Great stanza :]]

    Third : Well it ' s not really a stanza , but you get the point . I like it as a transition . It ' s strong and really made me think about what is happening . Also , your word choice is amazing .

    Fourth : I feel so sad , this stanza is beautiful yet heartbreaking . oh man . I can just picture this event . Sighs . There are a few places where your words could of been flipped around but I won ' t pick anything out .

    Fifth : Another beautiful stanza . Geeze . I really have no complaints except you say promise them things . I don ' t like the them . It bothers me . But the last line is amazing . Amazing stanza dear .

    Last : I do not think there is one flaw in this stanza . I love it . You summed the piece up beautifully . I loved it all . Gosh . So overall , great job hun . 5 . 5

    Amber .

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