This is real love?

by Gizmo   Apr 12, 2008


Her converse still lay at your bedside,
cigerette butts with her lipstick mark,
your pillow will always smell of her perfume,
no one will ever hold your hand like she did.

& through it all you'll never met another girl,
that could light up a room like she did,
could do her makeup the way she done hers,
could make you laugh just as loudly.

this is first true romance at its hardest kiddo,
keep smiling on through the hurt and the pain,
raindows and starry skys are still yet to come,
the world will keep on going and people will keep on growing,
hearts will keep on beating, and girls will keep on cheating,
love will keep on hurting but you just keep on flirting,

theres always another fishie in the sea,
no matter if you always thought,
'that one was the only one for me'

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  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Another wonderful write from a great poet. The flow was excellent, and I loved your choice of words, you are very talented. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    I like the title , but I wish it said Is This Real Love . It makes more sense , I guess . But be prepared , I comment as I read each stanza and am capable of changing my mind . So yeah , here it goes . . .

    First stanza : I love the opening line . Wow . And the imagry only becomes more powerful as the lines continue . One thing that takes away from the piece , is the lack of capitalization . That is one of my pet peeves so yeah . Overall , a great first stanza .

    Second : Well , I would of liked the first line if you didn ' t use the & sign . Idk . Hmm . Oh and I think you meant you ' ll never meet another girl . I really liked this stanza though -- The storyline behind it as well as the whole piece so far , is great .

    Third : I love the opening line . Aww . Lol . Jk . But I did love the line . Normally , I would not of liked the word kiddo but it worked nicely considering the tone of this piece . I think you meant rainbows in the third line . I like this stanza . Longer than the others and it had more of a poetic note to it . Your flow was smooth for the most part .

    Last : I like the old saying being tied in with this one . But I am not sure if you spelled fishy right . Lol . It ' s okay though , spelling is not everyones thing . I liked the way you summed up the piece .

    Overall , a great piece . A couple errors but nothing too bad . Great job hun . 4 . 5

    Amber .

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