Comments : Locked Away

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    WOW! If only we could all the pain, suffering, and crimes that take place outside of ourselves.

    I really like the message behind this and the genuine emotions that scream through to the reader.

    This poem was excellent; however I see one little flaw. You wrote:

    "Maybe it'll be different and I'll have more power.
    So until then I'll just stay locked in my tower"

    I think you should say "Maybe one day ....."

    ~~Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    This is a really interesting poem! I love how you say so much with so few words - that it real talent. I love the meaning behind this poem.. how there is so much going on in our world but there is no way we can do anything about.. as if we are locked up

    There is something holding us back from helping people.. and it is just the way life is.. we just feel so helpless...

    Great job writing about this. I really enjoyed it and your word choice, flow, and rhyme were great.

    Maybe one day it'll be different and I'll have more power.
    ^^Amazing line. It's such a great thought isn't it?

    Nice job. 5/5 =) Keep it up and thanks for the comment!

  • 16 years ago

    by XxCoNfUsDxXbRoKeNxXlOnElYxX

    WOW!! I really like this poem. It speaks the truth, cause there are things that need to be changed about this world we live in. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BurriedFaceDown

    Gives you something to think about from what is going on in your society every single day of your life.

    And to me this seems like that common princess theme. That's cool.
    Maybe one day it'll be different and I'll have more power.
    So until then I'll just stay locked away in my tower.

    SheDevil

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I felt like I was inside your mind here. Wow. I love this and how you'd really think about doing something to stop such things. Great job! 5/5