I really like the vivid deatils. It paints a clear picture for the readers imagination to follow.

Your wide use of vocabulary is also excellent. Not only did you describe with detail a scene, but you also detailed the emotions... Well done.

This piece can be interretted (sp) in so many different ways, allowing the reader to draw their own conclusion and go from there. I really like it when a poem does that instead of being set in stone on one perspective.

Good Job

~~Sher

A rating of 4.0 hmm I really don't like that. It shall have to change.

I truely found this piece to be stunning. This style is a little different from you, yet still holds all your poetic qualitys. Whilst reading this piece I felt relaxed and calm, almost as if I was drifting off into a daze. A beautiful one might I add. I liked the complexness of this poem. To me it was complex because the meaning behind it could be portrayed in many different ways. Depending on the persons point of view. I liked the kind of twist you portrayed towards the end.

His name was...
whispered only in the moments

These lines really stand out to me the most. The dramatic pause effect whispered to me because of how you sepeated the lines. You started this piece well.

And later he came back,
dragging his serpentine tail
from the maze of garbled recollection,
splintered in three parts,

I found those four lines to be really beautiful in a darkened sort of way. They held so much meaning and emotion to me. Quite effective.

Your vocab and word choice had still amazed me and I believe it will keep on doing that every time I read one of your wonderful poems. You put effort, heart and soul into them and that's what I really enjoy seeing. Well done. Definitly a 5 out of 5 from me. You deserve it. ~Mel

This is endlessly refreshing and captivating, it holds powerful inner darkness which is truly engulfing and fantastically portrayed. I think that I already told you that I admire your ability to write such effective and creative poems. This piece can be interpreted on so many ways and I really like that about your poetry.
There's no point in copying/pasting the favorite parts cause I truly loved this piece from the first to the last line.
Brilliant poem!

It seems, that in my head, I visualized a prominence.
Ya know?

Due to the title's reference to the sun, and due to your description, I thoughto of a prominence.

Otherwise, I enjoyed this.
It was small, but quite interesting description.

I'll put my own two sense in to it's name.
It's a shame to not have a name.
But him having a name, and no one knowing it,
makes him seem less important in my mind.
So, I shall name him Rumpelstilskin just for the moment.

Forever,
eternally,
remanding me,
what my name could be.

...........
You already know what I want to say.....

Purely amazing !