Evil Breeds

You shouldny let things bring you down... you should turn to the lord and he would take care of everything

This is excellently written. You managed to say so much and to convey the message greatly in just four short stanzas which is truly impressive. I like your choice of words is every stanza and the flow which is truly flawless. This is an enjoyable read, remarkable dark piece portrayed with haunting atmosphere.
My favorite stanza is;

- Darkness surrounds mind
Happiness flew away
Words spit serpents tongue
Changed it all in a day-
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Very powerful opening stanza, it pulled me straight into this piece.

All in all, very effective from the beginning to the end.

Keep writing!

^Takes ones dreams of hope
To make themselves strong
Pain awaits future doom
For all their past wrongs^

Hopefully in the end these kind of people will get what they deserve. It takes a special kind of person to think outside their box without assumptions and bias. You have done a good job conveying the kind of personality some people unfortunately have.

GREAT POEM 5/5

Darkness surrounds mind
Happiness flew away
Words spit serpents tongue
Changed it all in a day
^^^
Cindy my dear friend ...
Serpent <---- At the gate's of heaven the serpent's tongue shall be cut and the soul will be delivered the punishment due.

And you my friend <----- will still have the beautiful soul as your earthly body has today.

Light thought to be found
Struggled to reach for years
Extinguished in minutes
Bringing back lost fears
^^^
Sweet friend do not allow (anyone) to steal away the things you worked so hard to accomplish.

Evil hearts poisonous
Shallow minds seem to breed
Stomping destroy the weak
Fulfilling their own greed
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An evil heart may be poisonous hun but a beautiful heart stands taller and walks prouder and at the end of the day can say "I am a good person" ....

Takes ones dreams of hope
To make themselves strong
Pain awaits future doom
For all their past wrongs
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And their past wrongs shall be met with punishment.

My Aunt before she died of complications on the operating table during heart surgery and lived a very painful life for near 10 years .... always said
"I carry this cross for a reason" and she always believed that she carried that cross because it meant another member of her family would live a better life. (Perhaps free of pain and suffering) and she carried that cross with dignity until her dieing day. And back then it did not make much sense to me but now I find it to hold much truth.

Cindy free the serpent from you loving, caring, compassionate mind .... there is no room for her evil self there. Because simply .... you are much better than she will ever be.
Love ya hun
Luanne