Comments : Intellectual Dungeon

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Edit:
    There was very little to edit. I only questioned the last two lines actually.

    A minds eye can be all knowing
    Be forewarned, the seeds your sowing

    Since you're saying the mind HAS eyes implying ownership I believe there should be an apostrophe.

    the seeds you're sowing. Not your.

    Other than that, another A plus from me. Brilliant work. Great vocabulary as per usual and the subject, along with the title, were perfect for you to work with. Overall, this deserves a five.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jodie Phillips

    Another intellegant, in depth poem, your vocab is outstanding..great poem AGAIN mike xx