I loved it. i like the second stanza but only because i can actually understand that one. im not a really smart person.lol. im in the infantry in the Marine corp. thats how smart i am. lol. well great job

I'm with Frank. The 2nd stanza speaks to my sense of compassion, whereas the 1st one has a melancholy to it that makes the poem seem hurried and perhaps unfinished. That said, I am certain this is all about perspective and it will not be long before the former is supported here!