This is absolutely amazing. Your choice of words is simply superb, truly stunning and I think that you portrayed the whole message of this poem excellently. You shouldn't change anything here, whole poem is brilliant. I am in awe, you truly have a way with words and your vocab is amazing.
You painted pictures within words in each line which is truly remarkable and I admire the depths of this poem.
I read this piece twice and tried to find favorite lines to highlight in the comment but this is so original and powerful from the beginning to the end.
Excellently done,5/5 from me.
Keep writing, I'll surely check out more of your work as soon as I have time.

I love the intensity and movement in this poem. Every line seems like a new scene. As a lit. student, I truly appreciate complex poetry that I can pick apart, line by line, and attempt to figure out. However, you can read all of my true feelings about this poem in my little six paragraph rant in a reply to your post on the request to read discussion board.

Amazing piece - I absolutely am thrilled with it.

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Love this one the way you made the words flow and the feeling so intense was absolutely wonderful...amazing

Your poetry is lovely and artistic...
it reminds me of old romance novels for some reason!:] in a good way!

Im speechless this poem was amazing