Really well written!

I loved the flow of these lines :
"I cried, I shouted
I slammed at the door
I hit my wrists on the wall
I cried and laughed like a mad
but nothing changed the fact you were gone"

it was organized carefully.
as for the poem, it draws a picture of a poor girl that lost his love but couldn't stand it. the story was excellent and affects the reader. i like these kind of drama but only if they were not real because i don't for anyone to kill him/herself for love

Powerful write and horror, pain and sadness speaks here where so much is unleashed which is not spoken of much but can be understood by the reader as to what the writer actually wantz to say here...

Goood... Keep writinz... 007

Very heartfelt.... beautifully written...
the way you have expressed your emotions...the flow... really good...
keep up..

Iam speachless....
its really meaningfull love it in all kinds..

keep it up

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That was definitely sad...as I read I could feel the hopelessness of the character you wrote about. Good work

It's an interesting concept. So many times I've thought to write something like this. Your poem is certainly justified the theme. It's hysterical, it reflects the status of the mind when one losses his/her love. Well done!