1. your first rhym does not work....me and mystery
2. the flow is great
3. the meaning and emotion is there
4. the want for true love is pouring off the screen

5/5

Now this was good. To me though it felt more like lyrics which I liked. The long lines were effective. It's good to see people actually writing with good long lines lately. Instead of people saying that they look untidy. The rhyme scheme was good. You stuck to it. Even though me and mystery are not common rhymes they still came together to create a nice rhyme.

The emotion was beautiful. There wasn't any lack of it what so ever throughout this entrie poem. The meaning was great as was the flow.

I liked the title, but I've also come to see your poetry reads alot like a story. I like that at times. Most people don't as they say that poetry isn't a story, but I say there usually is a story within each poem, wether it's a lesson in life or a love story.

Overall a nicely written love poem ~Mel

Very nice write!! A couple spots where it seems the rythm skips a little but picks right back up. the last stanza is a bit rough and the third stanza could be also. I think after a time not reading this and then comming back you might see the same things.
But all in all a very good write.