A Spell

by Spirit   Apr 16, 2008


This spell shall never
make any since.
To those who live
or whose life is spent.

Make right the wrong that shall itself,
not be wrought by will.
Divide the hopes and thoughts of those,
whose time has come a still.

Beware all treachery from mortal lips,
which tear your soul away by bits.
When hatred you it begins to rip,
out smart all others match their wits.

Create from nothing a beauty true,
light the dark where others hide.
In a world barley held by glue,
don't the rules you abide.

Rid the Earth, away with doubt.
give giant loads of faithfulness.
Away with self consciousness, throw it out,
any envy shan't be expressed.

Destroy fear, where courage lacks,
heal the whips of rage.
Forget negativity, with a shatter not a crack,
life is your book, write each page.

And only then
will all be well,
but only if you
follow the spell.

*Sorry if this poem sound like it was written backwards I've been testing out new ways to write so that the words sound more like chants instead of poems. So please forgive me*

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  • 15 years ago

    by Gizmo

    Since supposed to be sense
    it was confusing.
    although i thin that you got what you were trying to do with the chants and things and that was good.
    good poem x

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This one provoked many mystical thoughts in my mind.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Hi Sam,

    Nice to read your poem. Would you plz clear out certain portions of ur poem? Or better way to silence the critics is by putting a kind of synopsis at the bottom of the poem.

    On the other aspects of the poem: The intentions are good and the thing that you wish to portray is understandable. The best stanza that I liked was "Beware all treachery from the mortal lips....." Trust me on one thing, this is the best thing I have read in my life...

    Technically, there are certain loose ends that you need to tie. Like the comment above mine has explained. Overall, technically i wish to give you 3.5 ratings but I could still understand the meaning of this poem and prompts me to give you 4.5. So the average score makes it 4.

    I m sorry if you find my comments offensive and brutal. But jus wanna make u realise that u r a far better writer than this one.

    Take care. Njoi.

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