The title of this got my attention, a well thought out and planned poem, also thought proking and gloomy, the kind i like, well written, 5/5

Awesome poem! I really loved it. It's exactly my type of poem, lol.

Also, I really like the title.

Thanks for commenting on my poem too!

--Silver

I love this poem :) i really really do its defo going in my faves! :) top class 5/5

I love it! It's extremly mystyrious! Makes you wanna keep reading!

Wow...that was amazing. You caught me with your first sentence, I loved how you phrased everything. And the end was.... breathtaking. I wish I could rate you higher than a 5/5, because this is very really good.

Very astonishing poem. I liked the flow to it. great work and keep it up. You're a good poet.

I like the line "forever running from the shadow" or something like that ... that was really strong =]... i just wish you had some other poems that werent so sad =[

Great job

and your a good poet

"Gazing at Crystal Rivers
Entranced by an empty sky
Cloaked by rancid shadows
Yet never questioned why"

^Great wording here, you really kept me interested in this whole poem, and you did a fabulous job! Very captivating and filled with emotions. Nice job. Keep writing! :)

The first stanza is awaum XD
Your a cool writter

'Gazing at Crystal Rivers
Entranced by an empty sky
Cloaked by rancid shadows
Yet never questioned why"

I loved the mysterious, deep, dreary atmosphere you convey in this stanza. Overall a hauntingly beautiful write. brilliant. 5/5 :)

OMG brilliant, your wording is so amazing
The first verse 'cloaked by rancid shadows' i mean wow so spine chilling

It seems you have carnage, yet have salvaged a masterpiece from dark emotions

This poem stands out

"Forever running from shadows
Consumed by a blanket of lies
Grey orbs remain so empty
Still scanning the lifless skies"
lifless=lifeless. you forgot the extra e.
I can totally relate to this particular stanza. It is like this was written about me.

"Smearing the tainted darkness
Digging deeper every time
Each word thrown onto paper
Crying this blood soaked rhyme"
This also relates to me very well.
I think that is my favorite stanza, but not by much.

I find nothing wrong with your rhymes, your word choice, or your flow. The picture sketched in my head moved along flawlessly. The emotions in this were strong. It was a good poem. I can relate, which makes it better.
5/5

Lexie

Quite impressing poem. Only thing that bothered me is rhyme pain-vein, because I think that it isn't original as rest of rhymes are. Anyway, you managed to create deep, vivid atmosphere through this poem. It is very interesting and it shows your talent. I honestly enjoyed. I like your topic, and the way you described your emotions is very detail and convincing. Simply remarkable job, very unique.

I would tell you which part i liked best but i love the entire thing. when i think i finally have it i read another part then get confused again. never ever ever ever ever stop doing what you do. your going places with these poems. 100/5 !! ~KM~

This piece, for me, wasn't as good as your other piece that I've read, but let's be honest, you do demand a high standard, so I wouldn't worry too much, lol.

Anyway, I just think that the reason this wasn't as good as you’re others, was that it lacked power. The words in this piece didn't exude strength. You're flow was perfect, as ever, and it was a good length.

Brad

Beautifully written! very good job