by Andrew
Wow really nice, the title was perfect, it drew me to read what was in there and know what i found? A beautiful nicely penned piece that flows really well. Like the messaged in it and the rhymes, really great work, keep it up |
by Ares
Woow! awesome poem! painted pictures in my head! really cool! |
by Salma
Wow Sara! it's amazing! the pictures are so vivid and it's like their happening before my eyes! |
by Nix
This is truly original and you put so much power in your words with came straight from the heart. |
by Nix
One more thing I thing that you ended poem on a fantastic way, you opened this piece with -a slave I must be- and ended it on so intense way cause you said what can actually become of one slave, so that added twist to the atmosphere, truly excellent ending line. |
by Cara
This i think was truely excellent. you express your feelings in an abstract way yes? that might not be so, but i took the poem as a way of telling people that you are sick of always having to fight for your beliefs etc. that they are always putting you down, no matter what you do. |