Comments : A Gladiator I Must Be

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew

    Wow really nice, the title was perfect, it drew me to read what was in there and know what i found? A beautiful nicely penned piece that flows really well. Like the messaged in it and the rhymes, really great work, keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Ares

    Woow! awesome poem! painted pictures in my head! really cool!

  • 16 years ago

    by Salma

    Wow Sara! it's amazing! the pictures are so vivid and it's like their happening before my eyes!
    awesome hun...
    keep the good stuff coming ;)

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    This is truly original and you put so much power in your words with came straight from the heart.
    I think that you expressed emotions greatly. This poem would be even better with some strong punctuation, for example it would sound so much more effective if you use full stops and not write each first letter capital. If you finish your sentences and use comas more than tone of the poem would change and reader can go more into the core of emotion cause the way you say it and describe some feeling is most important.
    Other than that this was truly creative, I admire whole idea of -gladiator- metaphor.
    You could make it little more descriptive on the point, about what you fight. For example maybe you could write one stanza about your beliefs, emotions and attitudes for which you fight.
    Anyway great poem, keep up. I truly enjoyed in this one.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    One more thing I thing that you ended poem on a fantastic way, you opened this piece with -a slave I must be- and ended it on so intense way cause you said what can actually become of one slave, so that added twist to the atmosphere, truly excellent ending line.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cara

    This i think was truely excellent. you express your feelings in an abstract way yes? that might not be so, but i took the poem as a way of telling people that you are sick of always having to fight for your beliefs etc. that they are always putting you down, no matter what you do.
    that might not have been how you intended it, but its the way i took it and it was a great read.

    5/5