Nice poem... it's Bittersweet
5/5 keep it up

This is a very sad and heart felt poem that tells a sad story of true love and devotion and I can feel it great work I love it 5/5

Tammi,

I can feel the pain in your words... its such a sad thing to who we love they dont want to be with us...

we want to live with them forever but they hate us. and dont wana satay wiht us even a single minute..

its so sad to who we love we want to make them understand our feelings but they ignore us all the time..

and we still keeping on love with them...

your this poem is full of sorrows... the ryming scheme was excellent..

i dont know ur name but i can call u my friend.
so listen my friend.
always rememebr that we dontstop lovingsomeone we jsut learn to live without them

but its so so hard to live without them... cuz we are truely deeply in love with them.....

your thisp oem reflects alot of sorrows... i can feel the pain in your words...

its such a sadthing that we want them and they are with someoneother. and they say to us to forget about themm but its not possible we cannot forget about them ..... its such a nice and sad poem..........

so touchy and deeep and full of sorrows.. infact this poem can be relate to every person who lost his love...

I'm learning to live without you now.
But it's really hard and I don't quite know how.
You were my one true love, my perfect soul mate.
By chance we met, I believed it was fate.

I loved you with all of my heart and mind.
No greater love would you ever find.
But your gone and I'm alone and scared.
Do you remember when you said you'd always be there?

these two stanza are the best stanza.. and i realy loved them.. cuz they exactly relates to my story
i will give you 5 good job

Beautiful and same time heart-breaking. Your emotions here where devastating, but in their best way.
It had so smooth flow and easy to understand making easy to connect with the whole piece.
I'm so sorry if it happened to you, only can imagen how it could feel.

Brilliant write 5/5

This is very sad but very beautiful in a heartbreaking way that no matter what you can't seem to get the love of your life out without crying or being upset. This was just so emotional and i really liked this alot.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

I was me and you were you
And together we were too good to be true.
You left me here to weep and cry.
I've done it every day since you died.

- These lines are amazing. Very emotional. The last line really hits you, though.

I'm learning to live without you now.
But it's really hard and I don't quite know how.
You were my one true love, my perfect soul mate.
By chance we met, I believed it was fate.

-I love the first two lines here. Kail, I feel your pain. I know how you feel/felt.

I loved you with all of my heart and mind.
No greater love would you ever find.
But your gone and I'm alone and scared.
Do you remember when you said you'd always be there?

-Did John really tell you that he'd always be there for you? If he did, I'm sorry. That's why I'm here for you, just so you know. I knew how he felt about you; those first two lines are from him to you - you just wrote them down.

I still miss you each and every day
And I still miss you in every single way
You said you'd love me til the end of time
But I guess for you it was the end of the line

I can't seem to be happy without you
I don't like to do the things I used to.
Everywhere I go I see your face.
And I can't seem to keep up with life's fast pace.

-Whoa. I like that last line. Simply amazing work. It's true. It's like you're in your own world after a loved one dies... only it was my brother and your boyfriend.

Sometimes you visit me in my sleep
One more night with you is another memory to keep.
And when I reach out to you, you disappear
Then I wake up and realize you never were there.

Now your face is but a memory, your laugh is just an echo
I barely remember your voice and my spirits are low
I think I forgot how to laugh and smile
Without you my life is no longer worth my while

-You ended on such a sad note, Kail! Life really isn't all that with John Mark being gone, eh? He was always good for a laugh. He's my favorite memory.

Sorry for the long comment. I just really, really loved this poem. I'm glad that I know you. And remember that I love you with all my heart.

Though this was a sad story, and I hope that it isn't true, I feel as thought the rhymes were a little forced. Everything flowed together nicely, until it was time for the rhymes. But other than that, it was a good read. Sad, but good.
5/5

~Lace

It's a really sad poem but so beautiful at the same time. I'm not going to go through all of the poem becausing I have nothing to criticise and also I would just be repeating myself after every few lines, saying how much I liked it.

I espiecially liked the piece where you said 'your laugh is just an echo'. I'm not entirely sure why I liked it, it just sounds really well thought in the poem. Well done, 5 out of 5.

Oh men!! it almost made me cry, i am somehow baring the same amount of pain and how i wish i can bring back the old times.. this poem is so lonely with simple description and words you created a heart warming piece

Aww that was a really sad poem!! but i loved it..it flowed & rhymed wonderfully, as if it was never a problem for you. but such a sad poem!!
keep it up=n= take care!!

Really good poem!!! 5/5

I understand the pain that this poem portrays and ive lived the situation. You made me remember a few moments in my life. I really liked the poems ive read and Im adding you to my favorites. 5/5

This is a well written sad poem that has brought tears to my eyes

I can't find the words to praise it enough. It seems to have beeen written from the heart and soul

Wow... this poem touched me deeply, it's so hard moving on. Great job, i love your work,

keep it up 5/5

This poem is the most intense i've read in so long. you portrayed every emotion so well. This was so great i really enjoyed reading it. 5/5

Wow. This poem is very emotional and heartfelt. I thought you did a wonderful job writing about this person who you've lost. It almost brought me to tears -- not because it was about someone passing, as is typical, but it was the feelings you showed for this person, and how much they meant to you. It's not easy to write about losing someone who was so special to you; I know. This poem is beautiful. I loved it, 100%.

"I loved you with all of my heart and mind.
No greater love would you ever find.
But your gone and I'm alone and scared.
Do you remember when you said you'd always be there?"

^^ In this stanza here, the third line -- "your" should be you "you're".

That is the only mistake I could find. This piece is simply amazing. Great job.

5/5

``Briana

It's really sad and touching poem...I loved it...
Great job...

I'm really sorry, I swear I'm not a mean person, but all your poems are nothing but the same as every other want-to-be-writer.

You really need to describe more, use emphasis, use emotion; put your heart into it, basically.
I don't feel anything from these poems, and as I said, they're just like every other poem I have to force myself to read.

Open your heart and write from there.

xTheEcastasyofSuicidex 3.5

I can really relate to this. My friend didn't commit suicide, but he did move very far away without even telling me we were going. We'd been best friends for three years, so the hurt ran pretty deep. Obviously, since I've never had anyone close to me commit suicide, I really don't know what you went through/are going through. It was an excellent poem. 5/5

Beautiful poem.