Aww thats sad.
fav stanza

She is all i think about
I hate its her I'm loving
to me she is the world
to her I'm just a cousin

[[ you will find some one who will love you back loves. more then a friend and not like a cousin.]]

Aww....deep feelings in such a short poem....I liked it! ^_^

Um is she really your cousin...cuz if so,thats weird =P lol i like the poem tho ^.^

Any guy that writes as well as you is sure to find someone :) 5/5

Great poem...i like the way you write. What makes is better is that its something that is actually true. It gives it more meaning! So great poem, and keep writing, cause i know there are a lot of girls out there, who love guys who express themselves the way you do.

Nice work,its hard to love someone and he dont feel the same for you? this is what i see if i'm wrong tell me?
you did god jop and you can be better,i love when you say:I'm lost in my life
shes found in my dreams
forgetting about her
is harder than it seems
its so real 5/5

Although the word use is simple, i really liked it. there's no point filling a poem with long, unecessary words when all that needs to be said is what you feel. Reminds me of what i wrote at your age, keep writing and it you will only improve :) nice one

Ummm I think it is kind of weriod...if it wasnt your cousin you were writting about..it would have been great.

A heart that is stolen
but I want it back
because she doesn't care for it
shes taking me off track
`Hm, I find the wording a wee bit odd. Like it should be, "A heart has been stolen; and I want it back" instead of "but I want it back" because when I think something's stolen, of course the owner desires for it to be returned, but I think you put it that way on purpose? Just noting. Also, the rhyme sounds a tad ... shoved in there. Like it just popped into your head and decided to force it to work, but when I think about the meaning behind it, it's completely norm for such a thing to take one's life off track.

I'm lost in my life
shes found in my dreams
`Oh, stunning lines! The word choice is so simple, but they're put together in a way that touches down to a deeper, sweeter level -- for me, it's when one is lost ... forlorn in their lives, looking for what they've misplaced or had taken from them; the one you love though, she's something keeping you sane -- but in this situation, she's only reachable in one's fantasies.

She is all i think about
I hate its her I'm lovin
`It would make more sense (to me) to have it be "I hate that it's her I'm lovin'" (I don't like the shortening of loving, but either way).

And I totally get it; my best friend fell for her cousin, but she didn't find out that he was her cousin until after it was too late, only this wasn't a second cousin or a third, so it's even more unacceptable to society. I wish you the best of luck :)
..__MiNDYY

A really nice poem, not long but long enough. The rhymes are not forced at all and the wording flows well. Keep it up!

I dont love this poem. i think its a bit too breif, and not that i have a prob with short poems its just this is short and it doesnt give enough emotion. its too simple and seems like not enough time or feelings were put into this. it seems like an amateur poem and from reading your others you've written many better

overall, a nice effort

Short and sweet. I dont think it needs much else. Wonderfully written. I can relate... but I also agree with Everly's comment :)