Wow! that was intense, i liked the emotion, i can truthfully say that was sad... i couldnt imagine.where did u get this idea from?its very good! flow was good too... keep up the writting! 5/5 always ur friend
Kate~

Hey thanks! Its something I had to write for school. its called a ballad. I kinda bent the rules a lil' for it though. at first it was supposed to be about just an American soldier but it just kept going.lol. ty.

Not bad, I almost fell asleep, not really, lol, but it was okay all around so its worth a 5/5. Keep it up.

Also, In order to enlure your readers to read more of your poetry, choose a better Title, and a good topic line or sentence. Then you will receive more visits and comments. :)