This was cool some parts we are ok but the rest good job.4/5

Wow, this was a strongly stated poem, i could tell the emmotion in it. I bet there was alot of emotion that went into. Keep it up! 5/5

This is one of the poems that I can find nothing wrong with. It was flawlessly written and the word choice was absolutely amazing. Kudos for you. 5/5

I like your depth..your darkness.. you have a way of drawing a reader in with it.

Such a sad poem...I genuinely hope that you have not had this experience...

"Your message written on the wall in blood
You made it sound so easy
The world was too much
The people too many
So you ended it"

I love the way you did not rhyme at the end, it added much emphasis to what you were saying.

"Now its all over, we're at the end
Leaving me to explain
For I found the body
I found the blood
I have the dreams"

This almost made me cry, i'm not even kidding. *I found the blood, I have the dreams* This makes me realize of what you are going through. Simple words, but because they are so simple, it hits me harder.

"I still see the blood on my hands
And dripping down the wall
Your brother running in
Sinking to the floor
He blames himself

But life goes on, for me anyway
Though he saw your body too
He couldn't take the pain
Your brothers body found
Hanging from his tree"

These last 2 paragraphs tied everything together for me. The way you wrote it was able to let me know what happened after this person's death.

This poem shows how one person's suicide will always affect the people they leave behind. It shows it beautifully. If this really happened to you, i'm deeply sorry, and I can only hope that this experince will make you stronger.

5/5
Keep writing

This is really good. and so sad what depression does.

You are so vivid in your work. Your depth is endless and so flawless. This poem has such emotion. Keep it up.