by Mr. Darcy
Such a clever write, using the last word of each line to begin the next. A nice challenge wondrefully executed! |
by Mr. Darcy
Such a clever write, using the last word of each line to begin the next. A nice challenge wondrefully executed! |
by Marc Ortiz
Wow that was one of the best poems I've read for the past month. It was beautiful. Flow was flawless. The meaning behind your words are very deep. Excellent job! |
by Sarah
Wow ! well written & beautifully penned poem...Emotional & strong..It took me back to where I once belonged...great job, keep it up |
by Cindy
Tom |
by Ingrid
Tom, |
by Tom Swart
For those that like the style of this poem using the last word for the first word or thought of the next sentence there is someone else using it. Hellon uses it quite well also and I enjoy her works. She calls it looping. I did not know of this style and used it for this poem by pure accident but it felt good and I kept it going through this poem. It is the only one like it that I have written this way. thanks to all for the wonderful comments as well as private messages on this poem. |
by Nobodys Hero
Another Excellent write, i loved the style you have written it in, very interesting =] |
by skyfox
I was totally left in awe of the mental picture and the raw emotion that your words conjured. You carefully crafted a brilliant soul wrenching piece. You are very good at writing and I will read more. Thankyou for sharing. |
by June
Such a touching and truely beautiful piece. |
Wow, |
by Krzysztof J
A poem like your others writen with so much wisdoma nd years of ecpierence is so enriching on the sences :) thank you for sharing :) |
I really loved the descpritiveness, metaphors, and personification you used. Usually I won't even bother reading poems that use the kind of anaphora or repitition of the last word that I found in your piece, but the way the words were capturing overwhelmed that. =] |
by gracey grey
This love struggles to hold itself and trys to find strength from its past. |
Tom you are obviously a gifted writer, that much is evident from reading your poems,this was a very clever poem and was so beautifully expressed, a resounding well done |
Nice, I like the form that you used to write this poem. Its really interesting the way you wrote this. |
by Ken
Thsi was a great poem the way you used looping was perfect. The mean of the poem is very deep, deep enough to the point that I had to read it a second time. keep up the great work. |
by retha
Tormented be the soul to feel, reasured in time all scars grow and wounds heal. |