I liked it alot great job....i liked it alot

I like the setup of the beginning and end slowly.... slowly...slowly... I thought that set a great mood.....and i very glad of how the poem turned out the end.....it was very much like a story that you couldn't tell anyone with your mouth....almost like it had to be in a poem! :) good job 5/5 No negatives!

That was very good.
I like the story setup and how it turned out.

Oi this poem is awsome love love love... i rated u a 5 so um yer coment on my poems u can rate them ones if u like...

but um yer nice story line