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Tracey at 2004-05-23

The best word I can think of the describe that poem is "trippy". I really liked it, made me think that there is more to life. And yes, I added you to my Favourites! Nice one. Trace.

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David Munoz ( F ) at 2004-05-23

Now just think... If nothing is there, neither is your poem or anyone who reads it. Just something to think about. :)

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Heather ( F C D ) at 2004-05-24

that was freaky but gr8 poem

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Jessica ( C ) at 2004-05-24

Freaky? Not if you consider yourself in that position, at that exact time, but it is a little different from some other poems, which make's it all the better. I enjoyed your poem Randy, and Thanks so much for commenting and voting on my poems by the way :)

I'll check back up on you later.

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Pyro ( D ) at 2004-05-25

i like ur ideas,buddy, but what brought that on?

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~*Danielle*~ at 2004-05-25

Randy, Hi the poems that you read are nothing compared to yours, My mom is never around to read them so i don't know how she would react, I live with my grandparents and right now my mom is in jail, but, I guess i just need to grow up and get over it

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Celi at 2004-05-25

Hey m8, Brill poem!!!! Jus wonderin, wat made u think of the idea?
Newayz, wicked, keep writing, *Chel*

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Climberguy at 2004-05-25

That was great. I sat around thinking about it long after reading it the first time, as I usually do before responding. I love it when I read something that can play in my mind long after I have read it. Great Poem.

Climber

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Randy East at 2004-05-25

One day along time ago, I started thinking about the world, and the planets, and just the vastness of the entire universe. I sat along time just baffled by the enormity of it all. Ive alway been intrigued by space and just existence in general. Well after thinking about that for a long time. What better to do than think of the opposite if it. I'm mean what if there was absolutely nothing, its hard to comprehend nothing because nothing in a sense is still something your still thinking about, you cant just tell yourself there's nothing, you have to feel it. To do that you must go even deeper into the idea of it with your mind. I did that one day i will never forget the feeling i had, it was scary. it almost made me gasp for air. Here and there when the subject comes up with friends i like to tell them about it, most the time they cant do it, but its all good. Ill always remember the idea of it. I call it exfinity, because infinity is a never ending amount of something. Thus exfinity, the never ending amount of nothing.

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Hi Randy
That was amazing! I have no problem telling you that this was one of the best poems I have ever read!
You deserve all your comments on you poems.
I would also Like to thank you for commenting on mine and Hope you read some of my other ones to as I will read yours!
Thanks again. OC

Randy, great poem!! That was really good...and yes very trippy!! I really liked it though!! Wonderful job!! I can't wait to read more of your poems!! Please, keep them coming!
Amy

That was an amazing poem. It is a very difficult thing to understand and describe, nothing is..but I think you captured it real well

its niceto see someone on the same wavelength as me.

lol thats cool Mcdave, thx

Wow i loved it...i've never been able to write about something like that...really awesome...your poems are always awesome to read...i hope you'll post some more.
Luv,

-Blue ^_~

This pulled me in. I love the flow and enjoyed the rhymes.
You are a very good writer. I am looking forward on reading everything you post.
Nice
-Peace

great Randy....loved it mostly because it was so flipping unique!!!! wonderful to read poems that are different and this was great!! take care, Michelle :)

wow...i loved it, i had definitely never read anything like that before...so justg great job...major props to you...keep it up...it made me feel like there wasn't any life...nice poem

Interesting Randy. As is characteristic of all my comments, I will attempt to limit the accolades I give to the poet or poem (which doesn't mean that I don't appreciate your writing, I think it is great!) Okay that is enough of that. Down to the nitty-gritty. There were times in your poem when I felt the rhythm get thrown off, especially when there were many comma breaks, or during long lines filled with many syllables. Not all poems need to have perfect rhythm however, and so that did not weigh too heavily upon my mind. There were a few grammatical errors that I will point out now. I think the word you wanted on in the last stanza is not 'affect' but rather 'effect'. It is a terribly hard difference to notice, but I am pretty sure you want the word' effect'. In the second to the last stanza, you write 'its', and it should be 'it's' because it is a contraction. Good work Randy.

I will attemp this later definatley and let you know, cos all i can think about right now is how great your work is.
Everything you write is so unique even to your other poems, i think you are fantastic. I found space for you on my favourites list!

that was really good

I liked it, very, very original and creative. You convey your message very well, Keep it up!

Left me with a feeling of emptiness, yet wholeness at the same time. Weird way of expression, yet the truth.

I like this poem very much and it really is about nothing
but i enjoy your poetry and am also amazed by it.
continue writing

PLEASE

This piece is very unique, really enjoyed it. 5/5, Em

I really like this piece because when you sit and think of just pure nothingness it makes it impossible to feel bad about how little any of us might have in life right now. Sometimes its difficult to watch people who have the whole world and all the money in it.... but atleast we have something and not the complete opposite. Nice job 5/5

I experience or I went through this when I was five... seriously, I ask my mom. But she didn't have an answer other than we are the work of god.
It felt horrible to think that there is nothing there, not even the galaxy. In my mind I just pictured the white but the white wasn't there. I picture a room, but the room wasn't there. I picture myself, but I was not there. Everything turned black and then not even the black. So tramautic event, with one explanation.

This was beyond clever. exactly the same philosophy of the hollows Devinne. great poem and it did take me on a mind trip. nicely done!