Hiiya.
Okay..
Stanza 1:
- the view of the poem is telling the story, which is good, as many features and images are described, as a technique: imagery. Also I liked the descriptions:
'The waves swallowing it into its deep water grave,'

Stanza 2:
- also good imagery is used here. Also, a metaphor is used, which adds more effect ;]
'That constantly bleed tears of rejection'

Stanza 3:
- again! Great descriptions! Favourite line is:
'A triumphant look crossed her brow.'

Stanza 4:
- very descriptive in this one too. Also more metaphors used, which is great.
Metaphor is:
'Staining like ink.'
Also like how you’re telling the story as I read, very affective.

Stanza 5:
- AGAIN! Great descriptive language! Love the imagery!
Favourite lines:
'She fell to her knees,
Holding her regretful mistake.'

Stanza 6:
- Imagery is still pretty good here! Liked how you have described the scenery.
Favourite line:
'A single tear rolled down her cheek.'
^ very elegant.

Stanza 7:
- Again a beautiful description. Like the setting and the mood. But I think there’s a mistake, line 4, fell. I don’t think that a rose in water can 'fall onto sand'??
Maybe think about this one?

Poem Conclusion:
Very interesting and sad poem. Really liked the descriptive words and imagery used. Metaphors used are also good. Although, if I may suggest a few improvements?
- When writing more/other poems, try not to drag the poem along- keep it simple.
- Maybe the poem should be a little shorter, just a little, maybe by 1 stanza.
Otherwise a great poem, very descriptive!
The construction is also good, and had an interesting story line, setting, mood and character.
Well done! Keep it up!
Good work! Good Luck!
5/5
-- Nicole xx