My Heart Stops A Beat

Joe
This poem made me smile. When we fall in love the happiness and joy occupies all our thoughts.

Your radiant smile
Your soft tender lips
The happiness glows,
From deep within

This Stanza really stood out to me. When you see tha one you love or just think of them you do glow from deep within. The glow of a loving heart.

Good job!
Take care Cindy

Joe, your romantic style still flourishes even to this day. It has been a while since I've read your poetry, but reading this one feels like the only thing that has changed, is the constant improving of your style.

This was a very romantic, passionate poem. It brought a smile to my face as I read it, in a low, subtle tone. It suits the mood right.

The only thing I was wondering, is where the rhyme scheme went. I'm not too picky with them put, I was curious. It didn't effect the poem at all for me.

It's a very good poem, and I wish you best of luck on the contest.

I'm not one for love poems, because I feel like people just repeat the same things over and over, and it gets a little repetative.

I did ,however, like your descriptions. Words like "radiant" and "tender" really put vivid pictures in my mind.

I was kind of confused about the rhyme scheme. Some parts rhymed and others didn't, it threw me off just a little, but not that much, so I wouldn't worry about it too much. It had a great flow, I think that was what made me overlook the rhymes.

Overall, I thought it was a really sweet poem. You're a romantic aren't you? Just an observation. hehe.

Good job!

Keep writing!
Cayce