Heartbreak High

She runs to the bathroom
'Cause her heart is aching
Starts gulping down pills
Don't care what she's taking

A nice opening stanza, the flow was neat and kept rhythm. Maybe instead of overuse of the words she and her, it could start "running to the bathroom" Just to cut down on the pronouns.

Takes pill after pill
Fills her glass up with water
Her poor old mum's
'Bout to be without a daughter

Once again, a nice little stanza showing the story progressing, the last line seemed a little off, one too many syllables i think, but it could be the way i was reading it.

It's the same old story
Up in 'Heartbreak High'
Some girl kills herself
Over some stupid guy

Hmm... overuse of the word 'some' here but i can't think of what could replace it on the top of my head... Maybe.. "another girl dies?" i'm not sure, will take some thinking.

But a life's too precious
To Just be taking
So don't give it all up
Just 'cause your heart is breaking

Once again, the flow seemed to be very off with this stanza, which is a shame as it's a very good message within the words. Maybe get rid of the word 'But' though as starting a stanza with that word is a bit of a cop out (i have done it myself time to time though, haha) Maybe "A life is too precious"

Overall, a very good poem. A bit of tried subject but we've all been there. It was nicely written

4/5
Gem

I really liked that this was written about a girl, even though you are a guy. I loved how you really sent the message out there, that guys arent worth it. Well thats the message i got anyway. Suicide rates are increasing dramatically and breakups are a lot to blame. But i think that one should be happy enough with themselves first. i dont think that made sense, sorry.
The flow was pretty good, and i liked its simplicity.
5/5

This was well written! It has a very good message to it, it's sad that people feel the need to do this sort of thing. nice job, 5/5

[: Well written. Short, but strong, and holds a good message. The flow was a little rocky but overall I really enjoyed it. Keep it coming!

Okay... so this is an advice. It's good. And that's it.