I like this one better I think that this one is more meaningful just because of the changign of the ending....if I may make a suggestion I think that for the last line you might want to put 'till death do US part" instead of we, I mean that it is greeat either way and I am sure that if he loves you it wont matter.

Wow!! i love every minute of it u inspire me to both to do more poems and show more love than i already am to the one i love,allisha nicely put ^__^