I usually don't go for the long ones, just because there's more to read, but I did this time. I liked your topic, of I'm guessing solitude, rejection. Very easy to connect with. There were just a couple of things:

"when dreams broke *it ripped tow* people that remained so dear."

by *tow* did you mean *through*?

"when dreams broke they ripped through people who remained so dear."

Just a suggestion, Great poem nonetheless.

Really good flow to this poem and I can feel the pain and sadness. Almost brought tears to my eyes and thats pretty hard to do. I really liked all the metaphors and imagery that you used. I can understand and relate to the feelings you portrayed. Keep up the great work!