5/5 its an amazing poem. very vivid.

So deep and full of meaning
really good poem
keep it up 5/5

This was well done, I enjoyed it a lot. There are two lines I don't like, though.

"that remember when it did start;" < this line could be improved, I think it would really bring the piece together if it was fixed

"of Vamperic Delight!" < this isn't a bad line, I just think "The Eternal Night;" would make a way better ending, especially because that is the title

Besides that I enjoyed reading this little piece. Good job! :)