I love the start!
you have a very unique writing style its nice
it sets you apart and makes you unique

maybe you could say how nothing could rip you apart and you know this will withstand the test of time

idk just a suggestion lol
5/5 <33

Tehee, why thank ya very muches! =)
I'll see what I can do. (;

Very nice poem and I think it's long enough...good work 5/5

That was really nice... keep writing,

Best wishz... Karan

A great poem. i dont think you need ot add anything on to it, i like it the way it is. it was lovely and worded very wisely.

And through the chaotic noises of our lives,
Our hearts will continuously harmonize

those lines were my favorite. i loved them. very powerful to me. very detailed. job well well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Great poem! I think its fine the way it is. Loved the whole thing! 5/5