by dante Apr 26, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Beneath a melancholy sky |
You had me with the first 4 lines but lost me with the remainder. Your flow was really good at the beginning but then it fell off and just threw off the poem for me. If you did a bit of reorganizing, this would be really good. I love the way you started off. Keep up the good work. |