Dig to the Blood

by Mark   Apr 26, 2008


As a word of warning, this was initially intended to be lyrics instead of a work of poetry. That said, forgive my lack of style and at times very stream-of-conscious writing.

Nightmare.
Wake me up again to tell me that its just a...
Dream.
Talk to me tell me that its all just a big scene.

Looking forward in reverse to try to find a way
to console my mind of the past i just lived out.
Pushing harder to explain myself only to realize
that i am left alone with no reason to fear.
But i want to yell my case so i can feel justified.
Why me? I cry wolf and no sheep come.
Lie here with me and hold my hand, listen to my words.
Tell me its OK, burden yourself for me!

I know what it feels like
from the other side. (other side)
But now i want the mirror back to me.
Help me realize.

Torn apart asunder.
Madness creeping under-
neith my bed telling me in voices.
I am everything but nothing.
Drained to the point that tears don't cry,
and rage causes pain to not be felt.
I am left inside such a fractured shell.

Passing out from drinking, twitching.
Justifying every motion with guilt.
Why should i be the one to suffer,
when it was all her?
Piecing together a heart's homicidal
puzzle, depleting energy.
GIVE ME STRENGTH!

I know what it feels like
to be on the inside.
But now all I want is to die.
I felt my hands dig for my blood
one more time
and came up so empty

Skin flakes falling to the ground.
Crimson caressing, mixing with them.
Still i feel so unpredictable.
Tell me its ok.
Tell me I'm ok.
I am still alive.
I am still here.
What do i have to fear?
I HAVE WON!

Strength beyond strength.
Victory with salted wounds.
The essence of the majesty
of silted recognition.
Drastic measures not sought out
with enough time left to spare.
Revelation the destination
and i was so prepared.

The news was like old hat.
I knew this and I realized that.
But it still stung like I
had just HEARD it for THE FIRST TIME.

Regal i stand with stone cold eyes.
I nod and attend with a thoughtless reply.
Feeling strangely inside out.
Like everything of mine was exposed.

I felt my hands dig for my blood
one more time.
And felt as though i was crazy.
"I feel your pain I know I
was once on the outside
and never could
look in."

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  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    We've shared a lot of poems together, and I feel this is not your best work. Maybe the fact of reading it as a poem, when it is meant to be a song, is the problem. I think that lyrics to songs often get away with things that poetry cannot, which is dumb, since lyrics are a form of poetry.
    Anyways, you asked me to be honest, so here goes.

    This stanza:
    "I know what it feels like
    to be on the inside.
    But now all I want is to die.
    I felt my hands dig for my blood
    one more time
    and came up so empty"

    ^Very typical use of words. Often try to avoid the "inside" "die" "time" rhyming scheme. People on here consider that amature, and that there are words way more creative than those.

    This stanza:
    "The news was like old hat.
    I knew this and I realized that.
    But it still stung like I
    had just HEARD it for THE FIRST TIME."

    old hat? o.O I don't understand what that means.
    Also, I know that you are trying to show the power and impact of the words in the last line, but it looks really funky. And actually sounds funky in my head. Since people are going to be reading this as a poem, you need to make it as a poem, so I would make those words lowercase.

    This stanza:
    "I felt my hands dig for my blood
    one more time.
    And felt as though i was crazy.
    "I feel your pain I know I
    was once on the outside
    and never could
    look in." "

    ^The format really needs to be changed. I read poems how the format is set up, and it sounds really funky like that.
    This is how I'd prefer to read it:

    "I felt my hands dig for my blood
    one more time.
    And felt as though i was crazy.
    "I feel your pain.
    I know I was once on the outside
    and never could look in."

    Just a suggestion. Everyone will read this differently. Also, you seem to have some uncapitolized "I's" lurking in there. You might want to change that. It bugs ALOT of people on here, including me. Those are my suggestions. Overall, not your best work, but it's not incredibly horrible.
    4/5
    LOVE YOU!
    ~Lace

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