A beautifully written poem...I enjoyed reading it...loved the emotions you put into it...5/5....

I love this. It held me attention from beginning to end and I think a lot of parts were very well written. I especially love this stanza,

"There is no-one who can take your place.
For I have stitched my heart with your love's lace.
Captured in it is the memoir of your face.
For I would never find again this beauty and grace."

That is so creative and the writing itself is just beautiful. 5/5

Realy thanks for all the comment ,it realy help

Wow this was just beautifully written. You described this lost love with so much meaning that it truly made me emotional because I know exactly how that feels to have soo much to say but never have the strength to reveal your love.

"There is no-one who can take your place.
For I have stitched my heart with your love's lace.
Captured in it is the memoir of your face.
For I would never find again this beauty and grace."
^The imagery here was just beautiful.

Well done *5/5*

Wonderful write full of pure emotion. I liked your choice of words, however; I felt you used the words, I, you, me, my, etc. way too much. The flow was good as well as the overall structure of the poem. Good Job!

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Today I wonder if what I did was right.
To be within myself and let my heart fight.
To lose someone so special like you.
And never to let out even a slight clue.

^^This was an excellent begining in my opinion it made me want to read the rest of this poem. I could personally relate to this stanza, and I actually had tears that started to form from my eyes. I am sure many others can relate to this as well, good job.

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I confess I was always crazy about you.
I admit I couldn't stop falling in love with you.
You filled my empty feeling within.
For you were with me through thick and thin.

^^Another excellent stanza. I could visualize all of this. The imagery was great!

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Every time I spoke to you.
The more I fell in love with you.
I had no choice but to let it go.
For I could bear an empty heart, but not lose a smile that made the dark glow.

^^Oh my, the tears are flowing on this poem, everything you are saying hits so deep within. Excellent write, I am sure many many people can relate to this poem such as I am.

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I saw my dream breaking, and yet I held back my tears.
To fulfill your dreams which you always whispered close to my ears.
I was in pain and yet I pretended to be strong.
As I always wished for you to be right and me to be wrong.

^^Again this stanza really hit home with me. I can realte to this poem through and through. Your words are so true and so touching in so many ways.

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I stayed quiet even when you said I am going away,
My heart wanted you to stop.
But my lips didn't have the strength to say.
Holding back everything, I saw you go away.

^^I liked how you ending with "away" in the first line as well as the last line, it really wraped this stanza together nicely.

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There is no-one who can take your place.
For I have stitched my heart with your love's lace.
Captured in it is the memoir of your face.
For I would never find again this beauty and grace.

^^I feel as though I was the one to write this poem, you are taking the words right out of my mouth and down on paper (or in this case on computer) Outstanding job, you deff. are captivating me within this poem.

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Now it makes me wonder, if I had committed a blunder.
Wonder if you ever felt the same.
Wonder if your heart skipped a beat,
Every time you mentioned my name.

^^The questions we should of asked, but didn't. This is something that a lot of people do and to realize it and mention it via a poem must be hard for one' to do.

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I should have expressed the way I felt.
Whatever the consequence I would have dealt.
I will love you forever.
To let you go, A hope that may be next to never.

^^Next to never, oh the words of forever. Love is a hard subject for many to write about, yet you captured it very nicely without making this cliche.

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I CONFESS I CAN'T LET YOU GO.

^^The feelings of true love, what better is there in this world? Excellent end to the poem.

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OUTSTANDING WRITE!!! I must say, I am in tears, this was amazing, you captured every feeling I have. This by far is a 5/5 and one of my Favorites I've read in a long time. Again excellent job on a superb write.

Peace, Joe

This poem was really good!!! I love the emotions you can feel in it && it was sweet! I personally liked the rhyming, and thought it went pretty well together, despite a few flaws here and there. Anyways, I LOVED IT! 5/5

Caitlin =]]

This was a really great poem to read. It held so many emotions and really kept you wanting more.

This poem really shows you care a lot about that someone. I hope this helped you get through

really great job!

5/5 From Me.

This was a really great poem to read. It held so many emotions and really kept you wanting more.

This poem really shows you care a lot about that someone. I hope this helped you get through

really great job!

5/5 From Me.

Now this piece, was definitely better than the one I read before -- the emotion was more evident, but it still hasn't quite fully blossomed. You used a lot of telling instead of showing -- the predicatable rhyming kind of took away from the creativity. I felt like you could've put more into it.

For I could bear an empty heart, but not lose a smile that made the dark glow.
`That line was also dragged out MUCH too long. It broke the whole flow and just tore me.

A lot of it was cliche. There were so many "I, my, you"s ... it kind of took away from the deeper meaning for me. It was like you were saying the same thing over and over and just dragging it out like crazy. But it was still nicely written -- it has its moments.

There is no-one who can take your place.
For I have stitched my heart with your love's lace.
Captured in it is the memoir of your face.
`Those lines were the most beautiful of the piece. This was the creativity I was looking for -- absolutely stunning.

Keep at it, love.
..__MiNDYY

Love indeed a horrid and great thing nice write

This poem is great..
and these are the lines I like!
~To be within myself and let my heart fight.
~I admit I couldn't stop falling in love with you.
~I saw my dream breaking, and yet I held back my tears. (ouch!)
~My heart wanted you to stop.
But my lips didn't have the strength to say.(I knew it was hard..)
~I should have expressed the way I felt. (it's hard but it's worth it)

thanks..

Wow... this piece is so brilliant... the rhyme, the flow, the way you wrote it, EVERYTHING! i read it and i was like "that is so amazing" and maybe it's because it reminds me of the way i feel for Daimon, or maybe because it is the BEST POEM THAT I HAVE EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!! the description of your love was just so amazing... it is the exact way i feel for Daimon in every tiny little detail... it is so amazing

5/5 - i only wish i could make it higher

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Oh! what can i say?? you exactly describe the feeling and the situation that i'm currently experiencing.. your work is like a simple story that people/readers would love to read all over again coz i know people can easily picture themselves as the main character of this piece..

Lovely poem. the emotion is so strong and the flow was PERFECT.
great job 5/5