Arcane

by EssenceOfLace   Apr 28, 2008


Jaded thoughts captivate
undefined, unconditional passion.
Lips locked, never to escape,
Hold tight, not to slip away.

Something so precious, so rare,
should not be taken for granted.
Treasured by most, unknown to some;
an epic battle with a nameless outcome.

Hunted like prey,
will bullets consume?
Will flames burn deep within
scarring the walls that surround?

One cannot determine the ache handed down.
Yet most do not fathom the beauty it beholds.

Breathe in.
Hold on.
Respect.
Trust.

Without love, there is nothing.
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Credit is given to "The Tasteless" for the title.
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=300201

*AUTHORS NOTE: If you cannot understand the meaning of this poem, read the comment
"The Tasteless" left, and then you will understand. =)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brad Quammen

    This was a very good poem.Seemed straight to the point and I like em' like that ;).You have talent so never let anyone tell you otherwise.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Edit:

    scarring the walls that surround?
    Capitalize the S in scarring.

    Great poem. I loved it. I have to say out of the poem of the week contest, this is up there for sure. I love the first stanza very much. I loved the words you used.

    5.

  • 16 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    This is a beautifully writen poem, I really like it you write very good keep up the good work :]

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    First off, the title is excellent, so captivating, it truly caught my attention.

    I fell in love with this poem lol... The whole message is portrayed beautifully and your choice of words is excellent through the whole piece. The atmosphere that you created is what impressed me the most- it is so serene and stunningly beautiful. This is very elegant piece.

    The first stanza is great opening for the whole poem. It caught my attention and pulled me straight into the poem. I have one suggestion: You maybe should, for the sake of the flow, rearrange punctuation in the third line and replace full stop with comma. It sounds better to me:

    - Lips locked, never to escape,
    hold tight, not to slip away.-
    ^^^
    The pause between lines is shorter this way and it gives completely different tone to those lines. This is only my opinion.

    Second Stanza is amazing, so powerful. I don't have anything to critique here, it seem flawless to me.

    The third stanza is my favorite one. I like your choice of words along with brilliant descriptions.

    The rest of the poem holds deep message of the piece and I truly loved it. You managed to make the ending more effective then the beginning and I haven't thought that it is possible lol

    Overall, greatly done.
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by noha

    Thats right without love we have nothing i agree with you,nice poem and powerfull words you write,nice imagination too,well done 5/5

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