WOW! The story of this poem is magnificent. It could totally be a movie!
Seriously, the story being told was breathtaking.

The word choice in the beginning was fantastic, but towards the end that kind of faded away.
A few suggestions. You need to capitalize the beginning of each sentence. That is very important. Also, the first line of the poem, the first letter of the first word NEEDS to be capitalized. That is a must.

I give the story a 5/5

~Lace

Wow. what a great write. the descriptions were very well done and i can picture everything in my mind! 5/5 ((:

Wow, excellent work, keep wirting xxx

This poem to me was just kinda boring to read Not my favorite if yours but it was okay! :(

It was good 3/5 may i make some suggestions...?

Writing letters that she never send,
/\ Send Should Sent

He did came back... yes he did..
To the echo of 21 canons..
And smile of win..
Wrapped in national flag..
Sleeping in coffin...
/\ Nice ending but first of maybe you should change echo into echos and maybe you could change and a smile of win into and a smile of pride

Other than that good poem