Nescience

Oh i didn't like this that much coz it's so hard to understand bcoz of the words u chose... but it's good tho.. it's just me.. i don't like poems with so much depth coz i find i hard to understand and absorb what u feel or wat ur trying to say in ur poem... =]

I understood it, but i didnt like it as much as some others

Nice work ,i realy enjoy my reading and i like the powerful words you write,i think the first stanza was long compared with the otheres but it still carry beautiful meaning,the flow was nice,well done 5/5

All in all, I like the message of the poem a lot. You conveyed truly powerful thoughts through this poem and it is pleasure to read.
It has narrative tone, it seems to me that every stanza is part of a storyline and the flow threw me off at some places but the whole content justified that.
I like your choice of words and the imagery that you portrayed is interesting. Your creativity shines through this piece.

- Chaotic resonance tar minds;
When will tranquility set sail?
Corruption is all that is left.
Betrayal as the extra baggage.-
^^^
This is my favorite stanza. It holds truly deep meaning and your descriptions here are amazing.

Whole atmosphere of this piece is overwhelming in a good way- it makes the reader really think about the message of every line.
I don't like the ending line too much but that is just my opinion. I think that this shouldn't end with unanswered question because the whole tone of the poem is changed in that line.
Overall, this is great read.
Keep up!

First of all very unique title. I like how you managed to make great connection between it and a poem without putting it in piece.

-Existance seems to escalate.
Appearances unfold into what can only be interpreted as guile.
Devotion is wasted into a frightful subterranean ocean.-

^existance should be existence
Anyway that is amazing stanza, you truly impress me with your work, each line is so deep and powerful. I don't have anything bad to say, truly original and refreshing lines, I admire your ability to write something beautiful as this. It is so interesting and you captured my attention, your choice of words is also fantastic and your expressed very deep message with little words. You have fascinating metaphors through whole piece though this is my favorite stanza.

-Treasured moments fall astray
as cherished becomes defend.
Though pride is immeasurable,
worthiness does not validate for destruction.-

^Wow, wow, fascinating write, it is so creative... You wrote truly impressionable stanza with so much emotions and complexness in it.

-Chaotic resonance tar minds;
When will tranquility set sail?
Corruption is all that is left.
Betrayal as the extra baggage.-

^Very effective part, I really think that your choice of words is excellent, you put so much detail in this which made it even more vivid.

-Deteriorated ambience
of a once compassion filled Mother;
Humble ceases to exist.
There is no stopping point.-

^You wrote this on such strong way, I can agree with topic if I understand it correctly, anyway you created really intense atmosphere.
ambience should be ambiance

-What shall be her conclusion?-

^I honestly think that this is utterly amazing ending, brilliant ending line, so powerful, so authentic...
This thought posses some simplicity but is very deep in same time.

Bravo! You managed to impress me with each stanza and line, this is going into my favorites, I am impressed with this poem on so many levels.