Deceitful Destiny

I managed a smile,
But a tear trickled.. good line

well written xxx

Wow. Loved it. I notect that last bit was from a lil poem about saying "I wrote your name on my heart and there it stayed forever", but with the difference of the heart breaking, really loved that, blew me away!
Very meaningful poem! 5/5

I enjoyed this greatly. The extreme desperation in every line after the reader glimpsed a ray of hope in the previous was perfect. I only have 1 suggestion, it is my personal preference only so theres no need to make any corrections.

Firstly, on these 2 lines
I saw an oasis,
But it transformed into mirage..

I'd suggest wording the second line differently, something to the effect of it was just a mirage, or it was only a mirage, because not only is that one line the longest of the depressing response lines and it makes it stand out unessesarily but also saying it transformed into a mirage, seems a bit impossible, its as if your saying something real turned into an illusion which is impossible as it had to be an illusion from the start.

other than that one thought your poem was captivatingly wonderful and flowed marvelously. well done

Aww =( this is really sad. a good poem though. it seemed short to me once i had read it, but it think it said everything it needed to