by Lonely Rider
Short ...straight and superbly written... |
I love this piece, it is truly powerful and very creative. The rhythm that you created from the beginning to the end is quite interesting and unique. Very refreshing read. I had to read this twice to fully understand the message but now I got it lol Your metaphor here is great, so original. I like the ending a lot, the last stanza is my favorite one. Overall, I think that the fact that you managed to express so much within such short piece is amazing. |
by Nix
I think that this could be more effective, I think, you wrote it on a good way with interesting metaphor but rhythm would be much more impressionable if you used punctuation. |
by Ash
A simply unique style. The starting stanza was really effective and the stanza'a that followed just increased the intensity of the entire poem. Short, straight to the point and well written! 5/5 |
by noha
Its realy good,specific words make it good,so deep and make me think to find te secret you hide in,i realy enjoy well done 5/5 |