Very well written...

"But I cannot give you my dignity in the Christ
It was His alone to give for whom He was sacrificed
Though there is much healing in the sacred wine
I cannot give to you or anyone what is not mine "

^^ I liked this stanza the most... very inspirational...the flow is great...

great write..

Waw,its nice poem and sad but i love the 1st stanza as you descipe how its going and he can take everything but not your soul,nice flow as well,keep writting,5/5

Not so long in verse, but long in it's lament of faith and individual beliefs. True, we each need to find our own. Great idea!

I loved the first two stanzas, they were amazing, and powerful, with great structure and rhyme. I think my favorite stanza, was the first one. However, I didn't really like the last stanza, it got a bit muddled and wasn't as powerful. I also thought that the flow died in this stanza. Saying this, I did like the last line of that stanza, very philosophical, as is most of your work.

Brad

I like how you let "them" have stuff that didn't matter like a broken heart but you got to keep the soul i love the first stanza...and i like how you put Jesus in there! <333
Jesus IS and inspiration and my life
HIGH FIVE =]

5-5

I thought it flowed very well and beautifully. it started so strong and stayed strong throughout the poem and right to the very end. the first stanza is a brilliant start, telling the things this person can have. the second stanza is an amazing body, letting the reader know how this person is pretending but isn't really a wonderful person. the closing stanza is the perfect ending, telling the person what they cannot have. truly inspirational, and i really enjoyed it. my only suggestion is to think about using punctuation. it will help your flow and help the reader as well.