Did you read that poem i told you to read before this?
cuz they're like...similar. which is odd if you didn't read it...but wahtever.

Why even read this poem?
You already know it's just a dream
No twist ending here my friend
Things are only how they seem

^ this is ridiculously relatable, i hate it...((put a comma after here, noun of direct address)) it's so bitter..so realistic.

this is great...can't wait to read part 2

Your eyes scream what you want to say
-creates a strong image