This poem is great. It has a great flow and the rhyming was good. The reason I say this is because half of the people who use rhymes in their poems either ditch them halfway through the poem or skip around between rhyming and not.. So you did an awesome job with that. Also the poem was really uplifting and it made me feel not happy.. but just at peace I guess you could say.. Good job. 5/5 from me.

I thought this was very well written, very sweet. I really like the way you started and ended with this piece. Al parents should hold that depth of love for their child. I think the 3rd stanza stands out for me, for this reason. great job and a very enjoyable read.

What a beautiful heartfelt write this is.

The sweetest breath I've ever felt,
Whispers on my cheek,
The faint perfume of life in bloom,
Begs me not to speak.

Sitting and holding our babies when they are sleeping breathing with their every breath. The bond between a mother and child. There is nothing more beautiful.

Little child of the sun,
I love to watch you sleep,
My tiny star, it's so bizarre,
So happy, yet I weep.

Tears of joy fall for the wonderous creation we have been blessed with. A love we have never felt for any other. A love bestowed on us by God. Sitting for hours on end taking in every single inch of the baby we love so much. The awe of this.

A single tear, so full of hope,
I'll do my very best,
To keep you warm, through sun or storm,
No matter what the quest.

I love this stanza. A mother would do anything for her child. Beautiful poem really beautiful.

Sleeping child, melting heart,
My angel here on earth,
I'll always show and hope you know,
To me, how much you're worth.

Love the ending. To each mother her child is her world.
Excellent job!
Take Care
Cindy

The sweetest breath I've ever felt,
Whispers on my cheek,
The faint perfume of life in bloom,
Begs me not to speak.
^^^
This stanza is beauty. The sweet darling smell of baby whisper upon our cheeks makes the heart beat to the tune of genuine love.

Little child of the sun,
I love to watch you sleep,
My tiny star, it's so bizarre,
So happy, yet I weep.
^^^
Awww this stanza is precious. We weep for when we look into this precious little gift's face we can't believe we have made something so preciously beautiful.

A single tear, so full of hope,
I'll do my very best,
To keep you warm, through sun or storm,
No matter what the quest.
^^^
Beautiful words spoken from the heart of a true parent.
Takes one's breath away

Sleeping child, melting heart,
My angel here on earth,
I'll always show and hope you know,
To me, how much you're worth.
^^^
I could not think of a more touching ending to end this beautifully woven piece.
You have touched my heart with your sincere words of love.
Excellent read
Luanne

So very beautiful...that wonderous pure love of mother for child....when the act of watching breath, chest rising and falling, the faintest sighs....are the most overwhelming, all consuming, life altering events imaginable.

"The sweetest breath I've ever felt,
Whispers on my cheek,
The faint perfume of life in bloom,
Begs me not to speak."

^ perfectly phrased and descriptive.....love the "life in bloom" insertion. The greatest love I'd ever known....that I felt for each of my sweet babies in my arms....

I really enjoyed this ...one of the most simple, profound, emotive pieces I've come across in a while....very nicely written

I love this poem, it portrays a mothers/fathers love so perfectly for a small child. 5/5